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Beitrag27.04.2010 um 18:07 (UTC)    
Titel: Hilfe! Englisch Referat - bitte korigieren!Schon wieder eins

Hallo allezusammen!
Ich hab mal ein Englisch-Referat - ich glaub, dass ich eher noch schlechter geworden bin, als ich vor ein paar Monaten war!
Wer kann mir Helfen???

Hier das Referat, über Barack Obama:
Zitat:
On the 4.th of August 1961 Barack Hussain Obama was bornon in Hawai.
His Father cames from a little Village in Kenia, his mum was born in a Little Canadien city.
Barack Hussein Obama went 1985 to Chicago to work there.
Barack saw fast that he couldn`t do very mutch against the crime. So he sayed I must do some politic. After that he learned very mutch on a famous university. After that`s he was a lawyer and he helpt very mutch people.
Sometimes later he worked on the Illinois State Senat. There he worked for eight years.
1992 he married Michelle Robinson.
2004 he was the third afroamerican men who cames into the US-Senat. This job coled in German: Bundestagsabgeordneter.
On the 11th of september 2008 the American peoples choesed him as the first afroamerican Präsdent of the USA. Before that’s he said his much famoustsentens: “Yes we can”. On the tenth of dezember 2009 he got the Nobel Peace Prize because he said “We need a nuclear-weapon-free-world”.
He has two daughters: Malia Ann who`s 10 years old and Natasha who`s 7 years old.
They have a dog, which is called “Po”. He is often with his family in the public. He and his family live in the withe house, like all other American presidents, like George W. Bush.
I heard that Barack Obama has his own plan. It called “Air- Force One”.
I think he is a great American, because he does very much for a safer world. For examply he made a contract with the Russia president, that they haven’t so mutch nuclear weapons. So they will make a safer world.


Hoff, jemand kann mir weiterhelfen!
DANKE schon mal im Vorraus!


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Beitrag27.04.2010 um 19:00 (UTC)    
Titel: Re: Hilfe! Englisch Referat - bitte korigieren!

-referat- hat Folgendes geschrieben:
Hallo allezusammen!
Ich hab mal ein Englisch-Referat - ich glaub, dass ich eher noch schlechter geworden bin, als ich vor ein paar Monaten war!
Wer kann mir Helfen???

Hier das Referat, über Barack Obama:
Zitat:
On the 4.th of August 1961 Barack Hussain Obama was born in Hawaii.
His Father cames from a little Village in Kenia, his mum was born in a Little Canadien Town.(Ein Häufiger Fehler heißt Innenstadt anstatt Stadt)
Barack Hussein Obama went 1985 to Chicago to work there.
Barack saw fast that he couldn`t do very mutch against the crime. So he sayed:" I must do some politic". After that he learned very mutch on a famous university. After that gelöscht he was a lawyer and he helped very mutch people.

OK denn rest kann ja jemand anderes machen. PS:Lern die Vergangenheitsformen die sind sehr wichtig (nicht helpt sondern helped)

Sometimes later he worked on the Illinois State Senat. There he worked for eight years.
1992 he married Michelle Robinson.
2004 he was the third afroamerican men who cames into the US-Senat. This job coled in German: Bundestagsabgeordneter.
On the 11th of september 2008 the American peoples choesed him as the first afroamerican Präsdent of the USA. Before that’s he said his much famoustsentens: “Yes we can”. On the tenth of dezember 2009 he got the Nobel Peace Prize because he said “We need a nuclear-weapon-free-world”.
He has two daughters: Malia Ann who`s 10 years old and Natasha who`s 7 years old.
They have a dog, which is called “Po”. He is often with his family in the public. He and his family live in the withe house, like all other American presidents, like George W. Bush.
I heard that Barack Obama has his own plan. It called “Air- Force One”.
I think he is a great American, because he does very much for a safer world. For examply he made a contract with the Russia president, that they haven’t so mutch nuclear weapons. So they will make a safer world.


Hoff, jemand kann mir weiterhelfen!
DANKE schon mal im Vorraus!
Beitrag10.06.2010 um 12:13 (UTC)    
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Hallo an alle!
Für die kommenden Abschlussprüfungen muss ich wieder mal ein Referat halten. Rolling Eyes Rolling Eyes
Wie ihr vielleicht schon wisst, ich bin eine Niete in Englisch!
Vielleicht könnte mir ja wieder mal jemand weiterhelfen!

Zitat:


Hier:

"Inuit – Life in the north
Today I tell you something about the native people of Canada – the Inuit.

The arrangement:
1. Basic information about Inuit people
2. Problems of Inuit
3. Inventions
4. What we think
5. Pictures

1. Basic information about Inuit people
Inuit are living in Canada, Greenland and in Alaska. Often, we call Inuit people “Eskimos”. But Inuit people don’t like, when somebody call they “Eskimos”, because Eskimo mean in German “Rohfleischfresser”. And Inuit mean in German “Menschen”. Inuit is as better as Eskimo. It’s friendlier.
Most of the native Inuit people live in Nunavut, Canada.
Thousand years ago, the first Inuit people came from Asia to Canada, Alaska and Greenland.
Today, there are 50,000 Inuit living in Canada.
Inuit people wear warm and colourful clothes, because there’s always cold. An I think, they wear colourful clothes, because when they are missing, other Inuit can find them easier.

2. Problems of the Inuit
Inuit live mostly in little villages. So, they don’t always have work. Most of the native people are unemployed. Many Inuit also go to big cities, where they get work and where they can earn money.
The other problems facing young Inuit is drugs an alcohol. Due to not enough work and places to meet friends.
These problems don’t destroy the Inuit – actually, the number of Inuit get more, because Inuit get many children. Experts think, that the number of Inuit in Canada can be more than 80,000, also 30,000 more than yet, in 2016.

3. Inventions:
The Inuit people had to work very hard, so they invented some things, which they needed for life. For example one invention are kayaks. Kayaks are small boats, which are made by bones from seals and polar bears, or some Kayaks are made by wood, which come from the sea. With kayaks, the Inuit people go fishing. Today, there are so many Inuit peole who go fishing. In most of the villages are shops, who sell fish cheap. Hundred years ago, there where a lot of fisher man which earn their money by going fishing.
Another invention is the anorak. Because it is always so cold, the Inuit invented an anorak. They made anoraks with fur. For example they hunted polar bears an took the fur of these animals.

4. What we think:
Inuit (Eskimos) eat meat, which they don’t cook. So we think that Inuit are cannibals.
Sometimes we are frightened when we hear this. Many people from all over the world think, that Inuit don’t hunt polar bears and seals. On the one hand it is right, to guard the animals. On the other hand, with hunting these animals, Inuit earns a lot of money. When Inuit are unemployed, they need the money."


Über jede Hilfe bin ich froh!

Lg,
Beitrag12.06.2010 um 08:15 (UTC)    
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Wenn andere immer deine Arbeit machen,dann
bleibst du immer "Dumm".Soll jetzt beleidigend
sein,aber wenn du später ein Job hast,oder ein
Vorstellungsgespräch,oder sogar ein Einstellungstest,
dann bringen dir unsere Lösungen garnicht,
da nur du den Test kennst,und dir dann niemand
helfen kann.

Ich gebe dir mal ein Tipp.

1) Hol dir eine Nachhilfe in dem Fach Englisch.Dort werden
dir deine Probleme einfacher als du denkst gelöst.

2) Es gibt im Internet Englischhilfe Seiten,wo du z.B ein Test
machen kannst.Natürlich kann man auch dort,die Zeitformen
lernen,oder wie du Texte übersetzen / schreiben.
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Mit freundlichem Gruß

Das Online-Team
Beitrag12.06.2010 um 12:15 (UTC)    
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Da kann ich online-bewertung nur Recht geben. Außerdem würde ich Dich bitten, das nicht in den Promotion-Thread zu schreiben, sondern lieber in Off-Topic oder Ich suche. Und drittens: Meinst Du echt, das hier ist grundsätzlich das richtige Forum, um englische Referate korrigieren zu lassen? Dafür gibts doch bestimmt eigene Foren, wo Dir sicher professioneller geholfen werden kann...

LG
Das Castmeteam

Ach ja, kleiner Tipp: Schreib lieber nur Stichpunkte auf und übe ordentlich, denn dann sprichst Du viel freier und kannst Deine Mitschüler auch mal angucken. Außerdem kannst Du dadurch Deine Stichpunkte deutlich schneller überblicken. Glaub mir, das geht besser!
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Beitrag12.06.2010 um 13:13 (UTC)    
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Hab gerade nen tollen Tag und nix vor...
Nichts inhaltliches, nur grammatische Korrektur. Im übrigen bin ich auch der Meinung, dass Stichpunkte und freies Sprechen dir deutlich mehr helfen werden.

"Inuit – Life in the north"
Today I tell you something about the native people of Canada – the Inuit.

The arrangement:
1. Basic information about Inuit people
2. Problems of Inuit
3. Inventions
4. Our opinion
5. Pictures

1. Basic information about Inuit people
Inuit are living in Canada, Greenland and in Alaska. We call Inuit people “Eskimos”, but Inuit people don’t like it, when somebody call them “Eskimos”, because Eskimo means in German “Rohfleischfresser”. The word Inuit simply means "human". Inuit is a better word than Eskimo. It’s friendlier.
Most of the native Inuit people live in Nunavut, Canada.
Thousand years ago, the first Inuit people came from Asia to Canada, Alaska and Greenland.
Today, 50,000 Inuit are living in Canada.
Inuit people wear warm and colourful clothes, because it is always cold there. I think it is easier to find missing Inuits in the white Landscape, when they wear their colourful clothes.

2. Problems of the Inuit
Inuit live mostly in little villages. So, they don’t always have work. Most of the native people are unemployed. Many Inuit also go to big cities, to get work and to earn money.
The other problems facing young Inuit is drugs an alcohol. It is the outcome of unemployment and the lack of places to meet friends.
These problems don’t destroy the Inuit – actually, the number of Inuit increases, because Inuit get many children. Experts think, that the number of Inuit in Canada can be more than 80,000 in 2016. Thats 30,000 more Inuits than now in 2010.

3. Inventions:
The Inuit people had to work very hard, so they invented some things, to survive. For example, one invention are the kayaks. Kayaks are small boats, which are made by bones from seals and polar bears. Other Kayaks are made by wood, found on the seashore. The Inuit people go fishing with the Kayaks. Today, there are a lot of Inuit peole who go fishing. In most of the villages are shops, selling cheap fish. Hundred years ago, there were a lot of fisher man which earn their money going, by going to fish.
Another invention is the anorak. Because of the cold climate, they made anoraks with fur. They hunted polar bears and seals to take the fur for making the anoraks.

Hier würde ich nochmal überarbeiten, meiner Meinung nach ist die erste These sehr fragwürdig, ich würde eher erklären, warum sie wegen dem Holzmangel Fleisch traditionell nicht kochen/braten . Bei der zweiten würde ich würde hier eher den Walfang problematisieren, der den aus Tradition Inuit in gewissen Rahmen erlaubt ist. Dennoch gibt es Erkenntnisse darüber, dass die Inuit dabei viele Wale nur verwunden. Diese verenden dann oft weit draußen und werden nicht geborgen.

4. Our Opinion
Inuit (Eskimos) eat meat, which they don’t cook. So we think that Inuit are cannibals.
Sometimes we are frightened when we hear this. Many people from all over the world think, that Inuit don’t hunt polar bears and seals. On the one hand it is right, to guard the animals. On the other hand, with hunting these animals, Inuit earns a lot of money. When Inuit are unemployed, they need the money."

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Gruß
Andres



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